Ch. 5 exercise 1

Julie Charlip uses many signal phrases to help her refer to the views of others and distinguish her own views. One of the phrases she uses is "X and Y wrote:". She also incorporates phrases like "I once asked X and X said". When Charlip wants to express her view she will start the sentence off with "I". The way she sets up her sentences allows her to introduce someones views, and then she can agree or disagree with the other person's view. The way she sets up her sentences also make her agreement seem more creditable because she brings in expert opinions. It shows that she has done her research.

Chapter 4. Exercise 1

Jean Anyon seems to have a combination of both for the summarized arguments. She tells the reader how one researcher has found that certain people receive different levels of education based on social status. Some classes are rewarded in classrooms for their behavior while others are rewarded for knowledge. Anyon agrees that people do receive different levels of education based on their social status, but she has some doubts. Most of the research has not been investigated in the United States so some of it may not be the case. In the US, people from many social classes can be in the same school, so it may not be accurate to say it happens in the United States.

Exercise 7.j

Cassidy Trom's paper looks a lot like a standard magazine article. The two columns per page and the randomly highlighted words mimic most magazines layouts. The magazine layout makes it easy for the reader to read the whole article. Unlike newspapers, the only thing on the page is the article you are reading. That helps the reader from being distracted. The magazine layout also allows the writer to get creative with the layout. The writer can add images at certain spots in the article to help illustrate their point. The layout also helps to keep the reader interested. The pictures and added emphasis on words varies the paper. If the images were removed and the paper was reformatted, the point of the article might get lost along the way. The story would not seem as interesting because is does not vary. The pictures and other format styles keep the material entertaining and non repetitive. The pictures allow the reader to take momentary breaks from the reading. Without those breaks, the reader is just reading one paragraph after another.

Persepolis Review from the other Day

The movie adaptation of Marjane Satrapi’s graphic novel Persepolis did a good job at recreating the novels unique style. I think the movie did a good job at telling the story as well. The movie left so scenes out, but that is to be expected with almost all booked based films. The story still turned out just as fascinating as the book. The film adaptation did many simple things that helped it keep the charm the graphic novel does.

To begin with, the movie recreated the graphic novels style to help preserve the experience of the story. People who read the book can easily pick up on who each character is in the movie. By turning the book into a cartoon like movie, the characters images were unchanged. Sometimes, celebrities play roles that ruin the story for fans that imagine someone else as the character. The film also did a good job at filling in what happened in the gutter of the novel. The story unfolds just like I imagined it did in the comic. The use of colors in the film also helped tell parts of the story. For the majority of the film it was all black and white. Whenever Marjane was in an airport however, the film was in color. The change in color helps to express her feelings at the time.

In addition, the language of the film helps to maintain part of Persepolis’s appeal. The novel is written in English, but you can tell that the characters are speaking a foreign language. In the film, the characters are speaking French. Watching a film in a different language draws your attention and makes you read the subtitles. Reading the subtitles make the movie seem like it is the graphic novel. That also helps people who read the book relate to the story and enjoy it. The voices in the story match the characters very well. The changes in Marjane voice match each stage of her life. The voice of young Marjane was just a believable as her teenage voice.

Furthermore, the film did a good job at telling the story according to the graphic novel. The film did leave out scenes that fans of the novel will definitely notice, but the movie did not make up any new scenes. Unlike many films, Persepolis was very accurate to the novel. The director of the film had to fill in lots of gaps left by the gutter of the novel. In the novel, the gutter allows the reader to connect what is happening however they want. The director’s interpretation of what happens in the gutter was very reasonable. Every scene connected flawless with the next.

In conclusion, I think the film faithfully told the story in its own way without ruining the experience of the novel. The art still was just like the book which made it easier for the viewer to get into the story. The viewer does not have to process new information like setting and characters because it looks just like the novel. Using the same style also helped to maintain the stories atmosphere because the characters looked identical to the novel. Fans of the novel do not have to worry about having bad actors casted for certain roles of the film. The language of the film helps add to the fact that this story takes place in a foreign country, and the voice casting perfectly matches every character. The director film made all the scenes flow together flawlessly, and told very well. Overall, the film adaptation of Persepolis is very good and definitely worth watching.

RC Spidey 2 suggestion

Both of the movie reviews talked about the directors adaptation of the comic to the film. The authors of the reviews had opposite opinions on the film, but they both focused on similar aspects of Spider Man 2. Todd Gilchrist review showed that he did not like the sequel as much as he did the first film. Gilchrist said that many screens longer than they needed too, and the directors message was expressed more than needed. Gilchrist's example about the elevator scene in the movie made it easy to see his point. Watching Spider man use the elevator shows that he is trying to act normal. We do not have to watch him ride the elevator all the way to the top just to understand he is trying to be normal.

Roger Ebert's review showed that he really enjoyed the sequel better than the first Spider man. Unlike Gilchrist, Ebert like how the director expressed his messages in the film. Ebert thought that the director flawless connected the story for the comic book readers and for the fans of the first movie. In Ebert's review he wrote that some people do not like Spider man 2 because it focuses more on the responsibility Peter has to deal with more than focuses on his powers. Ebert believes that the focuses helps make the movie better and different from other superhero films.

I think that both of the reviews dealt more with personal preference than anything else. Both of the authors expressed their views on the film. After they expressed their views, they gave examples that illustrates their point. Gilchrist did not like the film because he thought the scenes were drawn out too much. He pointed out many scenes that wen ton longer than they should have. Ebert liked the film and he talked about why he liked the film. Both of the reviews seemed more about personal preference. Gilchrist did mention anything that he liked about Spider man 2, and Ebert did not mention any dislikes about the film as well.

Persepolis: Comic vs Film

Both the movie and the graphic novel did a very good job at telling Marjane's story. The movie did a really good job at copying the art still of the novel. The subtitles in the movie moved faster than most movies, but it was still easy to keep up. Unlike the novel, the movie did not show Marjane's inner thoughts as well as the comic. In the graphic novel, sometimes a whole page was used just to put emphasis on Marjane's feelings. The movie also lacks some of the experience gained from story. The gutter in the novel helps show the reader that time is passing, but sometimes there were messages written in the gutter. The messages catch the reader off guard and draws attention. The messages explain things that may not make sense to everyone. Furthermore, the movie did a better job at showing Marjane's age. They way she talked and acted in the film helps the viewer to get a good sense of how old she really was when all the events where going on.

Chapter 1 Exercise 1

A. Recent studies show that there are dangerous levels of Chemical X in the Ohio groundwater.

B. Critics agree that this novel has certain flaws.

C. Some people find Football boring.

D. Many teachers believe that male students often dominate class discussions.

E. All my friends think that the film is really about the problems of romantic relationships.

F. Most English Professors are afraid that the templates like the one in They Say I Say will stifle their students creativity.

Graff Exercise 1

I found a paragraph that had some similar moves to Emily Poe's essay. The article from http://online.wsj.com/public/page/letters.html has similar structure. Halfway down the page there is a paragraph label "Don't Ski Alone in Remote Areas". The author of the two paragraphs starts off by saying what someone else said. Then he explains what he thinks the article implied. The next paragraph continues on with what the author thinks is the truth. Poe's essay starts off with the stereotypical vegetarian definition. Which is what someone else says. Then Poe's explains to the reader what she believes being a vegetarian is about.

Eisner and McCloud's Comics

I have never really read a comic book before, but I found Eisner and McCloud's comics interesting. Late last year I saw movie trailers for The Spirit at least a hundred times. I thought the movie looked really stupid. All I knew about the movie was the fact that the guy wears a red tie. As I was reading Eisner's comic, I wanted to actually read the comic to see what happens. McCloud's comic help to explain the parts of the comic book to me. I never paid attention to how simple things like the dripping water shows time is moving. Overall, I found that the articles made me want to give comic books a shot.

My Writing Process

Whenever I have to write a paper, I always start at my desk. I sit at my desk for a few minutes, and I write down the things I want to talk about in my paper. After I have collected my thoughts, I start typing my paper. Sometimes I will listen to music during the drafting process. Depending on the noise coming from my hall usually determines if I listen to music. Most of my papers start off following the five paragraph format. Once I have about five or six paragraphs, I start to revise my paper. My sister is very good at writing, so I send her a copy of my work to see what she thinks. Usually the next day, we do peer revisions in English class. After class I use my sisters comments and my peer's comments to fix my paper. Revision plays a big role for most of my papers. All the comments help me know that I am on the right track. The comments also help me catch small mistakes that I normally miss. Without revision, my papers would make sense, but it would have many grammatical errors.

Workshopping as a Genre

A workshop draft should look like a graded paper handed back from a teacher. The paper should be covered in marks and helpful feedback. Every workshop draft will have helpful comments on it to show the author what needs to be fixed. The comments can also point out to the author repeated mistakes. The errors highlighted on the paper should range from improper punctuations to grammatical errors.

The purpose of a workshop draft is to help the author improve their work and learn from their mistakes. The comments left behind are for the author to read. The author gets direct feedback from others in the workshop group, and sees what needs to be done. The final draft should look completely different than the workshop draft. The final draft should be properly formatted, and it should not have grammatical errors. Unlike the workshop draft, the final draft will not have any comments or small corrections marked on the paper. Also, the final paper is talking directly to the author's intended audience and no one else.

"Essay R" Feedback

If i was revising "Essay R", I would tell the author to change many of the grammatical errors. I would also show the author how to incorporate more outside sources. The paper is not bad for a rough draft, but it needs a lot of work. The paper needs to talk more about the 1980s wrestling. There are many small mistakes that should be corrected like using "80" and "eighty". The supporting paragraphs need to discuss only one topic at a time. The paragraphs need to compare or contrast modern day wrestling to it's 1980s counterpart. The flow of the paper is a little choppy, but the author can read the sentences aloud to find better ways to rephrase his words. Overall, with a little more work and some careful proofreading, "Essay R" can become a better paper.

Grade for Essay R

“Essay R” is a poorly written document about wrestling. The main point of the paper is unclear, and the sentences are choppy. The purpose of the assignment was to smoothly incorporate outside sources into the text. The author of “Essay R” only incorporated one outside source, and he poorly incorporated it into the essay. I am giving “Essay R” a 75 because even though the paper was poorly structured the person did attempt to complete the assignment. The author needs help with incorporating outside sources into their paper. The assignment is most likely one of the first papers due for the author’s English class. The student is not going to receive the best grade for the work they turned in, but I am not going to grade them as if it was further into the semester. The assignment shows the instructor that this student needs help on using outside sources and formatting essays.

First Homework Assignment

1. Bryan West's rhetorical analysis of Gabriel McVey's Do Not Be Fooled By the Clintons Again was clearly written to the readers of McVey's article. McVey's article tried to convince the reader that Hillary Clinton will be a terrible president. He explained his opinion to his readers by discrediting Bill Clinton with bias opinions. Bryan wrote his analysis to show that McVey's article should not be used to determine the best presidential candidate. Bryan is writing to everyone that read McVey's article and to everyone that is undecided for the presidential election. At the beginning of Bryan's analysis, he talks about how some people have not made up their mind on who they want for president. Then he talks about how he does not want them to be swayed into voting for the wrong candidate by reading bias articles like McVey's.

2. Bryan West's analysis is a persuasive article. Last semester my 1105 class had to write a persuasive article that explained an injustice in our life. Most of the persuasive articles that I have read are either movie reviews or political articles. On average, I read movie reviews more than political articles because most political articles require the reader to be current with political news.

3. Bryan West could have written his article to only discredit McVey's. If Bryan had written his article to show that McVey's article was bias, he would have successfully proved to his readers that they should not vote based on what McVey said. The downside to written only about McVey is that it still does not help the reader decide on a candidate. The way Bryan wrote his paper proved his point while still helping to show that even if the reader does not like Hillary Clinton, she is still a good candidate.

4. Bryan could have also written his article to the Republican Party as a complaint. All Bryan has to do is directly stated that he is addressing the Republican Party. He could tell them that the article was inappropriate and misleading to potential voters. Bryan wants the voters to vote for whom they want, but he does not want them to vote based off of McVey's article. Bryan could also give advice on how they can write their articles and keep it unbiased.

5. Like Bryan's persuasive analysis, scientists also write persuasively so they can get grants for their experiments. Scientists also write to prove that their ideas and experiments are real. They may even write to show that other scientist’s theories are wrong.