Thursday, January 29, 2009
My Writing Process
Whenever I have to write a paper, I always start at my desk. I sit at my desk for a few minutes, and I write down the things I want to talk about in my paper. After I have collected my thoughts, I start typing my paper. Sometimes I will listen to music during the drafting process. Depending on the noise coming from my hall usually determines if I listen to music. Most of my papers start off following the five paragraph format. Once I have about five or six paragraphs, I start to revise my paper. My sister is very good at writing, so I send her a copy of my work to see what she thinks. Usually the next day, we do peer revisions in English class. After class I use my sisters comments and my peer's comments to fix my paper. Revision plays a big role for most of my papers. All the comments help me know that I am on the right track. The comments also help me catch small mistakes that I normally miss. Without revision, my papers would make sense, but it would have many grammatical errors.
Tuesday, January 27, 2009
Workshopping as a Genre
A workshop draft should look like a graded paper handed back from a teacher. The paper should be covered in marks and helpful feedback. Every workshop draft will have helpful comments on it to show the author what needs to be fixed. The comments can also point out to the author repeated mistakes. The errors highlighted on the paper should range from improper punctuations to grammatical errors.
The purpose of a workshop draft is to help the author improve their work and learn from their mistakes. The comments left behind are for the author to read. The author gets direct feedback from others in the workshop group, and sees what needs to be done. The final draft should look completely different than the workshop draft. The final draft should be properly formatted, and it should not have grammatical errors. Unlike the workshop draft, the final draft will not have any comments or small corrections marked on the paper. Also, the final paper is talking directly to the author's intended audience and no one else.
The purpose of a workshop draft is to help the author improve their work and learn from their mistakes. The comments left behind are for the author to read. The author gets direct feedback from others in the workshop group, and sees what needs to be done. The final draft should look completely different than the workshop draft. The final draft should be properly formatted, and it should not have grammatical errors. Unlike the workshop draft, the final draft will not have any comments or small corrections marked on the paper. Also, the final paper is talking directly to the author's intended audience and no one else.
"Essay R" Feedback
If i was revising "Essay R", I would tell the author to change many of the grammatical errors. I would also show the author how to incorporate more outside sources. The paper is not bad for a rough draft, but it needs a lot of work. The paper needs to talk more about the 1980s wrestling. There are many small mistakes that should be corrected like using "80" and "eighty". The supporting paragraphs need to discuss only one topic at a time. The paragraphs need to compare or contrast modern day wrestling to it's 1980s counterpart. The flow of the paper is a little choppy, but the author can read the sentences aloud to find better ways to rephrase his words. Overall, with a little more work and some careful proofreading, "Essay R" can become a better paper.
Saturday, January 24, 2009
Grade for Essay R
“Essay R” is a poorly written document about wrestling. The main point of the paper is unclear, and the sentences are choppy. The purpose of the assignment was to smoothly incorporate outside sources into the text. The author of “Essay R” only incorporated one outside source, and he poorly incorporated it into the essay. I am giving “Essay R” a 75 because even though the paper was poorly structured the person did attempt to complete the assignment. The author needs help with incorporating outside sources into their paper. The assignment is most likely one of the first papers due for the author’s English class. The student is not going to receive the best grade for the work they turned in, but I am not going to grade them as if it was further into the semester. The assignment shows the instructor that this student needs help on using outside sources and formatting essays.
Thursday, January 22, 2009
First Homework Assignment
1. Bryan West's rhetorical analysis of Gabriel McVey's Do Not Be Fooled By the Clintons Again was clearly written to the readers of McVey's article. McVey's article tried to convince the reader that Hillary Clinton will be a terrible president. He explained his opinion to his readers by discrediting Bill Clinton with bias opinions. Bryan wrote his analysis to show that McVey's article should not be used to determine the best presidential candidate. Bryan is writing to everyone that read McVey's article and to everyone that is undecided for the presidential election. At the beginning of Bryan's analysis, he talks about how some people have not made up their mind on who they want for president. Then he talks about how he does not want them to be swayed into voting for the wrong candidate by reading bias articles like McVey's.
2. Bryan West's analysis is a persuasive article. Last semester my 1105 class had to write a persuasive article that explained an injustice in our life. Most of the persuasive articles that I have read are either movie reviews or political articles. On average, I read movie reviews more than political articles because most political articles require the reader to be current with political news.
3. Bryan West could have written his article to only discredit McVey's. If Bryan had written his article to show that McVey's article was bias, he would have successfully proved to his readers that they should not vote based on what McVey said. The downside to written only about McVey is that it still does not help the reader decide on a candidate. The way Bryan wrote his paper proved his point while still helping to show that even if the reader does not like Hillary Clinton, she is still a good candidate.
4. Bryan could have also written his article to the Republican Party as a complaint. All Bryan has to do is directly stated that he is addressing the Republican Party. He could tell them that the article was inappropriate and misleading to potential voters. Bryan wants the voters to vote for whom they want, but he does not want them to vote based off of McVey's article. Bryan could also give advice on how they can write their articles and keep it unbiased.
5. Like Bryan's persuasive analysis, scientists also write persuasively so they can get grants for their experiments. Scientists also write to prove that their ideas and experiments are real. They may even write to show that other scientist’s theories are wrong.
2. Bryan West's analysis is a persuasive article. Last semester my 1105 class had to write a persuasive article that explained an injustice in our life. Most of the persuasive articles that I have read are either movie reviews or political articles. On average, I read movie reviews more than political articles because most political articles require the reader to be current with political news.
3. Bryan West could have written his article to only discredit McVey's. If Bryan had written his article to show that McVey's article was bias, he would have successfully proved to his readers that they should not vote based on what McVey said. The downside to written only about McVey is that it still does not help the reader decide on a candidate. The way Bryan wrote his paper proved his point while still helping to show that even if the reader does not like Hillary Clinton, she is still a good candidate.
4. Bryan could have also written his article to the Republican Party as a complaint. All Bryan has to do is directly stated that he is addressing the Republican Party. He could tell them that the article was inappropriate and misleading to potential voters. Bryan wants the voters to vote for whom they want, but he does not want them to vote based off of McVey's article. Bryan could also give advice on how they can write their articles and keep it unbiased.
5. Like Bryan's persuasive analysis, scientists also write persuasively so they can get grants for their experiments. Scientists also write to prove that their ideas and experiments are real. They may even write to show that other scientist’s theories are wrong.